Drabble Day – Bottle

The challenge is to write a drabble (a story of 100 words – plus or minus 5). The theme of today’s challenge is “bottle”.


Jak guided the ship down through the soupy atmosphere of the giant planet. The garish yellow and black hull buffeted by the winds.

The ship pierced the cloud cover and Jak saw a jarring patchwork of greens and greys. The surface was coming up fast.

Closer, and there was a giant outcropping, a sickening pink that hurt his eyes. Beside it was a pool of dark water and he aimed the ship at it. Splashing down safely.

“Godammit!” swore Bill Carter. “These damn wasps are getting worse!” Screwing the lid back on his MegaCola he tossed the bottle towards the bin.


About dmlbooks

Dennis M. Lane is a British writer who left the shores of the UK in 1986 and hasn’t looked back since; he has now lived in South Africa for eleven years. His first poetry collection “8 Million Stories” was published in November 2010, followed by the collection of science fiction poetry and short stories “The Poring Dark” in September 2012 (two of the poems have been nominated for the 2013 Rhysling Award and another for the Dwarf Stars Award), his first novel “Talatu” in March 2013, and “The King’s Jewel” the first book in the five novel “Helix Key” series in August 2013. He is currently working on Helix Key Book 2 and a second collection of short stories (entitled "The Unmedicated"). When not writing, Dennis enjoys narrating and voice acting and recently set up Dramatic Voice Productions in order to take his interest further. To relax Dennis watches old movies from his extensive DVD collection, his three loves being science fiction B movies, Hong Kong martial arts, and anime. He has been presenting “A Review from the Jacaranda City” since May 2011 and has looked at classic old movies from “On The Beach” to “Creature from the Black Lagoon”.
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6 Responses to Drabble Day – Bottle

  1. mish says:

    Hey DML ~~ caught me by surprise at the end !! 🙂 I had imagined something totally different when I started reading your piece .
    ~ MISH ~

  2. Ryan says:

    I agree with Mish. And I like the vivid description.

  3. Tara Tyler says:

    pretty colors – then I had to read it again!

  4. tskraghu says:

    The unexpected turn! Made me read once more!

  5. Aheïla says:

    I’m with the others: read it twice and enjoyed the play of colors. The twist took me by surprise as well and totally repainted the meaning of what came before.

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