Set fire to your heroine and feed her to the lions

OK, so you are writing a novel, what is it that keeps the reader actually reading?

For some it may be the bodice ripping count, if some pale and palpitating young thing doesn’t get her bodice ripped at least every other chapter then it’s into the old supermarket box under the stairs with it, ready for a trip to the second-hand book store.

For others it’s body count, if they can’t picture the blood dripping from the spine of their book at regular intervals then why carry on?

Whatever it is that floats a reader’s particular boat, there is a common thread. Will the heroine find a protector, will the prisoner avoid the guards and escape, will the writer finish the book… that common thread is jeopardy. According to the Collins English Dictionary, jeopardy can be defined as danger of injury, loss, death, etc.; risk; peril; hazard. In writing terms it can be what provides the motivation to RUN!!! It may be a source of tension or conflict. In other words, it is what can take your story and transform it from being simply a series of scenes that take us gradually towards the conclusion, into being a story that is compelling. As a young reader, if I saw a blurb on a book that said it was “a real page turner” then it told me something about what I could expect from the hours that I was going to invest in reading; and if I wasn’t feeling compelled to turn that page…

I am currently writing a Young Adult novel in which the 16 year old heroine is kidnapped by aliens and, through her abilities as a storyteller, heads off a potential war between the human colonists and the aliens. Now of course, interspecies war is pretty high up there on the jeopardy scale, the end of the human colonisation of Onyx etc. etc. but the anticipation of that is not going to sustain the reader until the point where the heroine actually saves the day. So what I did was to make a list of things that could happen to the heroine and put her in jeopardy while she is on the journey to the final showdown.

  • Going to see the child psychologist
  • Being kidnapped and isolated from other humans
  • Telepathic communication with aliens could explode her brain
  • Attack by a lion (or the alien equivalent)
  • Bush fire!
  • Fall off a cliff into the sea
  • Aliens threaten to kill all humans
  • Breaks her leg
  • Poisoned by some strange fruit

Then, for each option, the question is, would this stop the story going forward? Having ones brain explode clearly cramps the ability to save the day, so that was out. Breaking a leg may not end the story (Misery anyone?) but in this case it would make things just too difficult. Anything else can then be seriously considered as a theme or subplot for part of the journey of the heroine.

Of course, finding the source of the jeopardy is only the start of the process, now the fun stuff comes in, writing the action, bringing in the conflict, describing the colour and smell of the vomit…

So, look out for my novel where I take a 16 year old girl, psychoanalyse her, kidnap her, have her attacked by wild animals, caught in a bush fire, almost drowned, poisoned, and made the focus of a potential war with aliens. And thank the stars (on her behalf) that I stopped my brainstorming there!

And so, as we come to the end of a post on jeopardy, there is only one thing to say…


……. tock

………… tick

……………. tock

………………. bop

………………… de bop bop

………………………. bop… bop… bop


About dmlbooks

Dennis M. Lane is a British writer who left the shores of the UK in 1986 and hasn’t looked back since; he has now lived in South Africa for eleven years. His first poetry collection “8 Million Stories” was published in November 2010, followed by the collection of science fiction poetry and short stories “The Poring Dark” in September 2012 (two of the poems have been nominated for the 2013 Rhysling Award and another for the Dwarf Stars Award), his first novel “Talatu” in March 2013, and “The King’s Jewel” the first book in the five novel “Helix Key” series in August 2013. He is currently working on Helix Key Book 2 and a second collection of short stories (entitled "The Unmedicated"). When not writing, Dennis enjoys narrating and voice acting and recently set up Dramatic Voice Productions in order to take his interest further. To relax Dennis watches old movies from his extensive DVD collection, his three loves being science fiction B movies, Hong Kong martial arts, and anime. He has been presenting “A Review from the Jacaranda City” since May 2011 and has looked at classic old movies from “On The Beach” to “Creature from the Black Lagoon”.
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